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Some people say that art subjects such as music, drama and creative writing are an essential part of education, and every school should include them in its syllabus. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion and examples from your own experience.

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Art
 subjects
such
 as music, drama and creative writing are fundamentals that enrich our lives.
However
, some parents say schools concentrate on teaching more academic subjects,
such
 as mathematics, science, literature and history. In my opinion, both academic and arts subjects should be taught and I will expand on the pros and cons of including
arts
Suggestion
the arts
 in the school program
further
 on in
this
 essay. On the one hand, academic subjects are often required when we get into higher educations. Academic subjects may be considered as a precious basement in the academic world. Personally, I have never taken an entrance exam of
art
 subjects for high school or university.
In other words
, schools measured my academic abilities using academic subjects, not
art
 subjects. To suit the current educational system, many parents in my home country, Japan, send their children to cram schools to study academic subjects deeply.
On the other hand
,
art
 subjects can strengthen the creativity and flexibility of individuals. Liberal arts, which include cultural understanding and knowledge,
also
 include other arts subjects.
In addition
, we are living in the era of automation and artificial intelligence which are replacing human labour and office work more and more. In
this
 regard, human creativity becomes more important.
Therefore
,
art
 subjects are being more in demand to make a difference between individuals and computers. In conclusion, academic and arts subjects should blend in a school syllabus in a balanced way.
Art
 subjects can
also
 nature a better
personality
Suggestion
person
 in individuals, so participation in these classes should be encouraged as well as academic achievements.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Curricula
  • Foster creativity
  • Emotional development
  • Cultural awareness
  • Global citizenship
  • Historical perspectives
  • Enhance academic performance
  • Communication
  • Employability
  • Soft skills
  • Problem-solving
  • Mental health
  • Stress reduction
  • Cultural appreciation
  • Diverse cultures
  • Interdisciplinary
  • Self-expression
  • Holistic education
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