who should be responsible for our old people? Who should be responsible for our old people?

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One of the worst challenging
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problems
of today's society is the question who should be responsible for our old people. It's not only a financial
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but
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a question of the system we want our society to have. In my essay I would like to tour different models.
Firstly
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, the company can be responsible for their retired employees. For
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reason, a special fund could be established. The advantage of
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model
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is, if
you
of you or yourself
your
belief in the capitalist system, that it should be the cheapest
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. A possible
problem
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is that the companies might have competitive disadvantage due to higher staff costs. A
second
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solution
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is that the government has
to
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for
sale the responsibility for
the old
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older
people's care. It can finance
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with its tax incomes. Actually,
this
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is the most democratic
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since everybody gets as much money as he or she needs. Unfortunately, as the present situation in our country shows,
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solution
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seems not to work very well. The government can no longer afford
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to support
all the old peoples. Another way of solving
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is to give back the responsibility
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of
the individual. That means that everybody must save money during their working life for the time after their achievement.
This
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seems to be not a very fair
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because
their
in or at that place
there
will certainly exist people who can't afford to save part of their salary. In
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case the government would have to care for them. A
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last
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lasting
solution
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is to go back to the old
model
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of the "big family" who cares for all their members. I could think
this
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is possible in our
days
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day
society because the family structures have so much changed. To sum up, I must admit that I can't find a
really
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real
good
solution
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for
this
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problem
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. All models have advantages and disadvantages. Certainly, we have to think about
this
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topic much more in the future.
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