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Today more and more people are using mobile phones and computers. Thus, people are losing the ability to communicate face to face. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is necessary for people to use mobile phones and computers. They can help us to keep in touch with our family members and friends no matter where we are. With the development of
message system
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the message system
a message system
message systems
, more and more
phones
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phone
 apps can substitute traditional tools
such
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 as GPS
,
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,
 people can use mobile phones or laptops to search the location. After that the phones will show us many different ways to get there and how long we need to
spent
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spend
 on the road.Even
more these
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more, these
 apps can provide some useful methods to us. More and more people like to buy articles for daily use online. It is convenient and without time consuming
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.
 With the help of mobile phones and computers
,
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,
 sometimes we do not need to ask others or communicate with them. As the result of
this
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,
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,
 some people’s language skill are getting weaker. They are afraid of communicating with strangers
face
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 to
face
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. The relationship between people has become estranged because the social media take us too much time. It is easy to lose the opportunities to
take
exchange thoughts; talk with
talk
 with others. Many people like to be a keyboard man on the internet, they express a lot of personal
views but
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views, but
 in the real life
,
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,
when they are
face
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 to
face
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 with someones, they prefer to keep silence.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • erosion
  • interpersonal skills
  • overreliance
  • digital communication platforms
  • convenience
  • efficiency
  • social bonds
  • enhance
  • bridging long distances
  • fostering connections
  • age groups
  • adept
  • integrating
  • landscape
  • emotional intelligence
  • nuances
  • striking a balance
  • limitations
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