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Having a good university degree guarantees people a good job. To what extent do you agree?

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Although
 graduating from a decent
university
 provides a good employment opportunity, I believe
this
 is not the only qualification required to secure a good
work
 placement.
This
 essay will discuss why I think a good
university
 degree is necessary, but will
also
 suggest what are the other important skills required in landing a dream job. The cardinal reason for graduating from a good
university
 program is that it provides a sound technical knowledge in the subjects.
This
 is of utmost importance because in a professional working environment, there will be a lot of complex challenges, which an individual will come across. In order to face
such
 challenges having fundamental basics of working domain is pivotal. To illustrate, a chartered accountant is highly respected in the business world due to the in-depth knowledge possessed by these professionals to solve the intricate financial statements of an entity.
As a result
 of
this
 process, there will be a supreme quality of
work
 produced.
However
, strong subject knowledge is not the only skill required in the globalized business world. There are skills
such
 as being a team player and logical awareness to grow in a corporate hierarchy. With regards to the former, in the era of globalization where people from diverse background
work
 together, the trait of understanding the psychology of team members and supporting them is very vital to have a healthy
work
 culture. As for logical thinking, every board member would prefer a leader who thinks and acts logically rather than emotionally, which is for the benefit of common goals. In conclusion, from my perspective, in recent time
university
 qualification is the minimum requirement to get employed.
However
, skills
such
 as team player and logical thinking capabilities are steadily gaining importance.
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