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Some people think that it is the responsibility of governments to take care of the environment, while others believe that it is the responsibility of people to take care of the environment.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In the recent times, we have seen a rising concern on globalisation across the world.
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, some individuals have different views about whether the protection of the environment is under responsibility of
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 or of people.In my view, I believe that it should be a joint duty of the
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 and the citizens to take measures towards saving our surroundings. Some people believe that
government
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 plays a vital role in environmental improvement.To start with, the
government
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 has a great influence on environmental conservation. By stating various laws and policies regarding environmental issues, the
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 is able to control and supervise the factories and industries, which effectively regulate the pollutions ejection and sewage discharge.
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, the
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 is responsible to emphasize the importance of environmental preservation. As some uneducated people are unconscious of the consequence of
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, the
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 should educate them with environmental awareness,
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, promoting ecological activities or encouraging garbage recycle, which boosts the environmental interests of people.
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, some people insist that
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 cannot achieve conservation without the help of its citizens.We have seen
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 as a main concern across the big cities. We as individuals should start by taking small initiatives
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 as, a car share to work or using public transport, which could help in reducing the
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 levels. We could
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, jointly support the
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 by reducing the use of plastic bags and
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 help in recycling our waste products. In conclusion, the
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 has imposed various rules and regulations to reduce
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 and create awareness.In my view, the citizens have to
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, work towards protecting our surroundings, it should be a joint responsibility of the
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 and the individual to protect the environment.
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