We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

People have different views on whether we should help outside of
country
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the country
or not. While, our
country
need development and investment, people should help poor countries citizens.
However
, there are various
reason
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reasons
why we should contribute to our society
instead
of
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
nation. It is
moral duty
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the moral duty
a moral duty
of each
country
resident to lend help to the poor people residing in the
country
as they might be deprived
from
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of
food, clothes or shelter. Every citizen can contribute to the development of infrastructure, health department, and education through taxes to the government. At the same, there are some
non profit
not commercially motivated
nonprofit
organizations
work
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working
in every
country
for the welfare of the society and to provide social services to people who are in need of financial help or even moral support. Wealthy people can transfer funds to
non profit organization
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nonprofit organizations
nonprofit organization
a nonprofit organization
in order to make sure they are contributing to the society.
On the other hand
, if other nation is in need
for
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of
support, we should lend hands to help them. People should provide support to other
countries
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country
residents
instead
of only helping their own
nation
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nation's
citizens. To give one example few years ago,
syria
an Asian republic in the Middle East at the east end of the Mediterranean; site of some of the world's most ancient centers of civilization
Syria
sire
was in poor condition,
lot
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a lot
lots
of people including kids were injured and suffering due to deficiency of food and doctors in order to protect them. Any human being, would be felt pity for them and they donated food, clothes, even they sent
first
aid help to Syria. If someone
have
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has
all necessities, how they can let
manking
all of the living human inhabitants of the earth
mankind
suffer in pain, when they can lend their hand to recover those poor people from
worse life situation
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the worse life situation
a worse life situation
. Developed countries have enough resources to feed their residents and they could stand in
favor
promote over another
favour
of underdeveloped countries which would be destroyed with the reason of natural or unnatural calamities.
As a result
, as a human being, we should not think about
ouselves
reflexive form of "us"
ourselves
yourselves
as being selfish rather than should take action to stop the destruction and flourish the life. In conclusion, an individual should give priority to their own
country but
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country, but
they should stand for what is right and in favour of
protection
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the protection
of mankind.

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