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More and more people in the city live in homes with small spaces or no outdoor areas. Do you think it is a negative or positive development?

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It is argued that plenty of people in urban areas tend to opt for small-space living without outside areas. Personally, I believe that
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 tendency produces both benefits and drawbacks. There are several cost-related advantages of living in small
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. In many countries, mass migrations from rural areas to megacities have increased population density, leading to high house prices.
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, it would be more thrifty for new residents to rent small flats compared with houses with personalized outdoor
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, especially for those with low incomes. In Da Nang
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,
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 a small apartment
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 around 70,000 dollars, a moderate-sized house with open space costs at least 200,000 dollars.
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, people living in small flats do not need to spend a lot of expenditure on appliances or home maintenance,
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 putting a little extra money each month into
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 account. Despite the benefits mentioned above, I believe that small accommodations can bring disadvantages to citizens.
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, living in
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 type of accommodation could result in a lack of privacy, exerting negative influences on an individual’s independence.
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, it is difficult for me to spend time alone because I live with my sister and my uncle in a cramped flat in a high-rise building.
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, outdoor
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 like front yards are an ideal place to do exercise and organize family activities
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 as barbecue
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. Living in a house without any open
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 would discourage people from doing
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 activities, causing them to suffer from a sedentary lifestyle. In conclusion, I argue that dwelling in small houses or flats without open
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 has both beneficial and detrimental effects.
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Ensure that the response fully addresses the task prompt and provides a clear, comprehensive overview of both the positive and negative aspects of living in small spaces.
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