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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Most people think that teacher should teach children to be a good person, while other people think that it is a responsibility of their parents.
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 essay agrees with the belief that a role of parents instructs their children
beceuse
for the reason that; on account of
because
 they know their children the most and they have more
time
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 together. Parents can understand what types of teaching that suitable
to
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for
 teaching their children, because they was grown
thier
of them or themselves
their
there
 children since was born. They know what thing that children like or dislike, some children prefer to copying from role model, it is their parent, whereas some children prefer to learn from the story that
thier
of them or themselves
their
there
 parent tell.
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, my sister likes Aultraman, it is a character in Japaness anime, so when my parents want to teach her they will tell the story about Aultraman and adding information about good
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 in the story,
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 as Aultreaman is honest so he is
super hero
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a super hero
. Teacher have a lot of
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 with children in school, they
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 teach them about manner of society. But,
the most
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the more time
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 that children
are spend
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have spent
 over a year is living with their parents more than study with
teacher
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a teacher
.
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, in Thailand, children spend about 200 hours per year in school for learning, while they spend
time
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 with their parents over 300 hours per year. In conclusion, parents should teach the children more than teacher because they know about their children and
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besides they
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besides, they
 have
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 to teach them to be a nice person.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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