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some people think that parent should teach children hoe to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.

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Some people opine that children should learn how to be good members of society from
school
, whereas others feel
this
 is the role of parents.
This
 essay agrees that parents should teach children how to be good persons. Parents should teach children how to be a good person because they understand their children more than other people. In the family will have some unique family culture or activity that who are
family’s
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family
 member
are know
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is knowing
knows
 while others do not get it,
also
 usually have many activities they do together which make it easier for parents to teach children.
For example
, when I was a little girl, my parents always taught me through the story at night about what is
the good
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the best
 thing which a nice person should do and what is the bad thing that I should not do. Even though children spend much time with the teacher
for
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in
education but
Accept comma addition
education, but
 children can spend time with their parents more.
Parent
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The parent
A parent
 has much time and many opportunities to teach their children because most schools accept children at age more than three years old, in
this
 period children have to stay at home and learn basic social skills from their
parent
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parents
.
Moreover
, while children can go to
school
, they still stay with their
parent
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parents
 after
school
, weekend and holiday. A parent can guide their children about
somethings
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some things
 that happen on the way while they pick up children after
school
,
it
it is
it's
 easy to teach their children when the whole family stays at home on the weekend and they can suggest children to be polite when meeting other people
in
Suggestion
on
 a holiday trip. In conclusion, parents are a very important person who should teach children how to be good people.

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