some people think that money is best gift for teenagers. others disagree. Discuss both there views and give your opinion

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In
21st century
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the 21st century
,
money
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is
gift
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for any age people, not limited to only teenagers. Lot's of people think that
money
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is the best things for youngsters, but all people not agree with it.
This
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essay will describe why
money
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is important for youngsters.
one
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One
the
first
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side,
money
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is everything for anyone in their teenage. Because teenagers require more
money
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than any other age people.
they
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They
focus on their career.
Nowdays
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Nowadays
education is very costly and
also
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in developing
country there
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country, there
are two types of student groups.
one
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One
from reach family and other from poor family.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
not only for
study but
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study, but
staying in university with new gadgets, clothes, cars as well as during their college
,
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,
they require lots of finance for cultural activity, sports and extra learning opportunity outside.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
think
that
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that's
why
money
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is everything for teenagers.
other
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Other
side, some people
not agree
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aren't agreeing
because they think whatever financial aid for teenagers, they could get from education loan, from their parents.
they
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They
also
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think that most teenagers waste their extra
money
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like they get from
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gift
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the gift
at needless places like dance-bar, weekend trips, drinks.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
they don't give
money
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as
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gift
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a gift
gifts
.
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although
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Although
such
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people don't consider teenagers financial condition. So they are
sometime
on certain occasions or in certain cases but not always
sometimes
wrong. As per my opinion,
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we should have to know
teenagers background nature
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the teenagers background nature
for career or business, and give
money
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as
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gift
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a gift
gifts
.
if
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If
teenagers
not use
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don't use
aren't using
finance at
approprite
suitable for a particular person or place or condition etc
appropriate
inappropriate
way,
definately
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money is definitely
definitely money is
money
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is not best for them.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial responsibility
  • budget
  • save
  • informed spending decisions
  • personal preferences
  • practical and efficient
  • unwanted or inappropriate gifts
  • impersonal
  • emotional value
  • thoughtfulness
  • personal consideration
  • wise financial decisions
  • frivolously
  • lasting memories and experiences
  • educational courses
  • hobby-related equipment
  • long-lasting positive impact
  • fostering interests and skills
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