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Band 6

You are working for a company. You need to take some time off work and want to ask your manager about this. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter ● explain why you want to take time off work ● give details of the amount of time you need ● suggest how your work could be covered while you are away

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
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 letter to request days off from work from the month of
February
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 till the first week of March. The reason to
get
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got
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 holidays from work is because I had to visit my parents in India to attend the marriage of my cousin which is planned to be in the middle of
February
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. Yesterday, I was checking on flights and in the first week of
February
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 the flights are much
affordable
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more affordable
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, and I will
also
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 get ample time to relax from jet lag to enjoy the moments with family and friends. After the wedding, I had planned to visit religious places with my parents to seek the blessings of God. So, from the beginning of
February
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 till the first week of
March
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March,
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 I had plenty of time to spend with family and enjoy.
Apart from
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this
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, I talked to my co-worker Sehaj, he is more than happy to cover my shifts and other assignments for our project. If he still needed my assistance, I would help him out over the phone. I look forward to hearing from you, Yours sincerely
Sehbaz
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Shahbaz
 Singh

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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph is focused on a single idea to improve clarity and cohesion.
coherence cohesion
Work on creating a more logical structure within the letter to enhance the reader's understanding and flow of information.
task achievement
Make sure to elaborate more on the key reasons for taking time off and how your responsibilities will be managed to provide a complete response.
task achievement
You have successfully used a polite and formal tone appropriate for writing to a manager, which is good.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Respectful greeting (e.g., 'Dear [Manager's name],')
  • Time off, absence, leave of absence
  • Personal circumstances, compelling reason
  • Duration, number of days/weeks
  • Cover duties, delegate tasks, work handover
  • Alternative arrangements, contingency plans
  • Preparation, advance work, assistance
  • Gratitude, appreciate, understanding
  • Inconvenience, minimal disruption
  • Request approval, formally request
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