In some countries young people have little leisure time and are under a lot of pressure to work hard in their studies. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?
Children and young men are educated differently, based on the country they live in. While in some countries it is common for teenagers to have free
time
to pursue what they want to do, in other places, young men are tought
to impart skills or knowledge to
taught
work
hard and study extensively, which comes on
the expense of their free Suggestion
at
time
.
There are many reasons why these differences exitst
, have an existence, be extant
exist
however
, in my opinion, it is mainly due to the economical environment of the country and the cost of living. As parents, we are naturally interested in assisting our child as much as possible, and give him the required tools to succeed in life. As a concesuences
, in heavily populated a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
consequence
consequences
coutries
, like China or Mexico, where it is hard to find a stable job, and buy an a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
apartement
, parents educate their children to study hard, and a suite of rooms usually on one floor of an apartment house
apartment
work
from an early age, so they will be able to build a career and earn a good salary. To illustrate, in Hong Kong, where the real estate prices are extremely expensive, it is costumary
for children to study 10 in accordance with convention or custom
customary
hour
a day, and Suggestion
hours
work
from the age of 14, so they will be able to buy a house. In contrary, in Israel, where there are plenty of houses available and many job vacancies, young people spend many hours pursuing their hobbies instead
of studying and working.
Although
it is important to buid
a career and make by combining materials and parts
build
bid
work
hard, not having anough
leisure as much as necessary
enough
any
time
can lead to increased pressure and anxiety, which, as a result
, can lead to reduced concentraion
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concentration
From
Suggestion
For
this
reason, I believe free time
should be incorporated within school hours and work
. This
notion have been implemented
among "google" employers, where a daily one hour free Suggestion
has been implemented
time
was implemented. Furthermore
, facilities, such
as a gym, movie theaters
and sleeping couches a building where theatrical performances or motion-picture shows can be presented
theatres
where
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
were
addedd
for people to use in their free make an addition (to); join or combine or unite with others; increase the quality, quantity, size or scope of
added
time
. Interestingly, despite the reduction in working hours, emplyers
efficiency increased
by 20%.
In conclusion, young men have varying amount of leisure Accept comma addition
efficiency, increased
time
, based on the cultural background he was educated in. This
, Unfortunately, can lead to increased pressure and anxiety. If we would incorporated
free hours within our Suggestion
incorporate
work place
, we can reduce a place where work is done
workplace
this
unwanted stress and increase our productivity.Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
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