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Some people are afraid to go out for fear of being robbed on the streets. Still, there are robberies that happen inside houses. What do you think is the best thing a person can do to ensure his or her own security? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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A lot
 of people fear that they will be robbed on the streets so, they decide to restrict their movement. Despite
this
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,
theives
a criminal who takes property belonging to someone else with the intention of keeping it or selling it
thieves
 still go around visiting people's houses. With
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 condition, it is important to consider factors that can help improve one's
security
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.
Firstly
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, the government should empower the
security
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 officials, release more of them to the high risk areas and every home should ensure that police emergency numbers are on speed
dail
operate a dial to select a telephone number
dial
.
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 will ensure prompt response from
security
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 officials
hence
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, culprits can be caught in time.
Secondly
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, neighbours should watch each others back by reporting any strange movements or persons that they notice to the appropriate authorities. By so doing, suspects can be nabbed and their
plans
an aircraft that has a fixed wing and is powered by propellers or jets
planes
 destroyed. The British Broadcasting Corporation reported that a small community in
south eastern
situated in or oriented toward the southeast
southeastern
 Nigeria employed
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 method.
Consequently
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, they were able to drive away armed intruders who stole their farm produce and improve the
security
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 in their immediate environment.
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, if the situation of an area does not improve with all these measures,
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 the people affected should relocate to another area where their safety can be assured. It has been reported severally that areas with recurrence have places like bars and clubs where these
hardended
used of persons; emotionally hardened
hardened
 criminals visit.
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, avoiding living in places like
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 can improve safety by more than sixty percent. Given these points, I believe that the best thing anyone can do in order to ensure personal
security
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 is to totally avoid all the areas known for
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 notorious act.
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,
government
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the government
 can by imposing
restriction
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restrictions
 of movement at certain times of the day while the
security
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 agents parade these areas.

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