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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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ืีA large number of people think that they have too many choices in the present. In my opinion, I completely disagree that having a numerous
choice
 is a bad thing.
Firstly
, having a
choice
 means you are free from being forced and
that is
 the starting point of everything, because creativity and imagination are the result of an ability to select your own option.
For example
, you have to create a light bulb with only three ingredients, if it fails, you will never find a
way
 to create it, but if it is a success you will never find a better
way
 to make it better due to a limited of choosing your own item.
Secondly
, from the point of view of most citizens as a customer, having
choice
 will likely prevent companies from taking advantage.
Such
 as, low quality product with high price and bad customer services. By that reason, a numerous
choice
 is the only
way
 to guarantee that you will not get robbed by companies and you can seek for the best of your friend and family.
However
, most companies will think the other
way
, because they will have more competitor due to people can selected only for what they want, and that will cost them more fund at the market, which will make them lose their profit surely.
This
 is the main reason why people were told that they have too many options, because they heard it from the company who stay on the other side, and
that is
 how the marketing work in real life business. In conclusion, having a
choice
 is the only
way
 to secure that people are a freeman, and by that freedom, imagination and creativity of the people will never be restricted, and no one can take advantage of you without your consent.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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