You are planning to go to a music concert in your town and would like a friend to accompany you. Write a letter to invite your friend to the concert you are planning to go to. In your letter, say: • what the content of the music concert is • where and when the music concert is • why you think your friend should go to this concert You should write at least 150 words

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Dear Rosaline, What a pity that we weren’t able to meet during the Christmas holidays. I hope you are doing well. And you have no idea what great news I recently heard. Our favorite rock band “Arctic Monkeys” is conducting a tour of Europe and will come to our country.

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, their concert will include all of their greatest hits from previous albums, and especially your favourite “AM”. Unfortunately, the concert will not be in our home town, but in Birmingham on March 28th, so if we decide to go, we will need to make travel and hotel arrangements in advance. Leave all

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to me, I just have time to do it now. I can't wait to hear from you and I hope your answer will be positive

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because lately you have had a lot of problems in your life and it would be great if you relax and enjoy the concert with me.

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, I'm sure we'll have a great time there, listening to our favourite music and having fun with fans like us. Best regards, Linda

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Task Achievement

To further improve task response, ensure that you explore each bullet point thoroughly. While you've addressed all points well, expanding on why exactly your friend should consider attending the concert, such as mentioning specific personal or emotional benefits, would make your arguments even more compelling.

Coherence and Cohesion

To enhance coherence and cohesion, consider varying your sentence structures and transitional phrases even more. You've done a great job organizing the letter and connecting ideas, but incorporating a wider range of linking words and phrases can make your writing flow even better. Additionally, make sure each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next, reinforcing the logical structure of your letter.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

179 words

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