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For centuries, important parts of education have remained such as reading, writing and maths. With the advent of computers, some people think that computer skill be made as a fourth skill to be added to the list. To what extent do you agree?

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Education over the years has been developed and changed drastically. A plethora of subjects has been amended, or even replaced for more advance ones in order to cope with new life demands, but still reading, writing and scientific subjects
such
 as math are usually remain as the core of any education system.
However
, the advent of innovative technology
such
 as computer and the advantages that it makes, forced educators to consider it as important as other subjects in any students’ curriculum. I totally agree with that and
this
 essay will explore
this
 issue in
further
 detail and before coming to a conclusion. On one hand, people should always be flexible and open minded by encouraging their children to learn more about computers in order to flourish their societies.
To begin
 with, there is no doubt that everything nowadays are operating through most sophisticated computers. Since it gives very high accuracy and facilitate very complicated situations.
For example
, all aircrafts have auto-drivers which’s operate via advance computers in order to get an accurate data about the trip and sometimes to take the lead in very dangerous circumstances that it's difficult to be handled by a human being with the same accuracy.
Moreover
,
such
 technology might help lots of scientists to improve and discover the world.
For instance
, NASA relies on certain devices which’s mainly operate with computers to get more information and photos about other planets.
On the other hand
, it’s irrefutable that nation who is teaching computers as major subjects will eventually suffer a lot. To illustrate, there is a conspicuous gap between developed and developing nations in many essential life aspects
such
 as transportations, education, health care and so many others due to poor technology infrastructure. As all of these services are old fashion which’s limiting their progression. To sum up, computers undoubtedly become one of the major subjects for students.Since it has the obvious positive impact on various essential life facilities.
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