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Some people believe that technology has made people’s lives easier while others think the opposite. Which do you believe and why?

#people #technology #people’s #lives
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Technology
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 is key to the growth of today’s modern
world
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. In
this
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world
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technology
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 is used in various ways
such
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 as Gadgets like
smart phones
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smartphones
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, computers and innovations like automatic vacuum
cleaner
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.
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 it is true that
technology
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 is making
individuals
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individuals'
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lifestyle
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lifestyles
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 busier,
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however
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 I believe
technology
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 Is very important in day to day
life
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 of an individual as
technology
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 is making
peoples
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life
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 easier by giving out more efficiency towards work and
also
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 allowing one to do better
communication
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. It is true that
people
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 are surrounded by machines which are making their
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life
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 busier
such
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 as by making them constantly use social media for responding to messages online or replying to emails and making them learn about new gadgets
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 as the automatic dishwasher.
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,
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technology
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 is made to help
people
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 out with their daily tasks and make their busy
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life
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bit
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a bit
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 easier
and
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helping them out with multiple tasks at the same
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hence
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 being more efficient.
Few
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 years back
people
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 spent a lot of
time
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 washing dishes by hand.
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, with the help of
technology
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 which takes care of these chores’ individuals will be left
more
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 energy in their hands. A lot of
individuals
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time
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 is being taken by
communication
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 as one has to answer multiple messages from different
platform
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platforms
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 in a day, at the same
time
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technology
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 is
also
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 helping
people
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 out with their
communication
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 as it is easier now to communicate with
people
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 from different
part
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 of the
world
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 using multiple online social media options made available, most popular being the Email which is used widely around the
world
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. In the early days
where
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 there was no
technology
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, communicating to far
distance
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distances
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 was only through
letter
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 which used to take days to reach but now
technology
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 is just making
peoples
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people's
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life
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lives
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 easier. In conclusion,
technology
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 helps
people
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 to be more energy efficient, saves
time
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 and enables
to
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do
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communication
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 more effectively across the
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.
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, even though
technology
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 is making one’s
life
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 complicated and busy, I truly believe
technology
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 is helping to ease a common human
beings’
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life
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.
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,
technology
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 Is the potential need for
this
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 modern
world
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 and will
also
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 go on to improve
human’s
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life
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 in a better way in the coming years.
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