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Many people believe that social networking sites such as facebook have had huge negative impact on both individually and society. To what extent do you agree?

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Usage of social media, mainly Facebook, Instagram have markedly changed which the boost of the internet.
Although
 people believe that individual and society are positively impacted by these platforms to solve social and global issues.
However
, I completely disagree with
this
 because its negative impact on adults and society cannot be ignored. To start with, I would discuss the impact on the individual safety and data security which is impacted by the social websites.
For instance
, many people shared their personal details on these platforms and main times
this
 information is accessible to the outside world which in result led to data breaching. User data safety is vital in
this
 internet advanced world. Todays, people share their travelling or outing information
also
 on social media just to show off and many times they are affected by other user’s social status. Another problem which can be due to social networking site is wastage of time and effect on health. Youngsters spend their most of time on the laptop or the mobile phones, surfing through these websites and
this
 can become an addiction to them. They take less interest in physical activities. Many times unverified information become viral on social sites. Users trust those details without authenticating news and they even start sharing with their family and friends.
As a result
, social networking sites hamper the work of individual and that too of society. In conclusion,
although
 there is a good side of using Facebook, Twitter and other sites. I strongly agree that they have some negative sides too, which cannot be neglected. Users should realize
this
 and learn proper usage of
such
 platforms more wisely.

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