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The world is experiencing a dramatic increase in population, which is causing problems not only for poor, undeveloped countries, but also for industrialized and developed nations. Describe some of the problems that overpopulation causes, and suggest at least one possible solution.

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Population
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The population
 of the
world
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 is rising day by day and we have to control over it. In early 1900, the
world
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population
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 started increasing due to factors like
invention
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the invention
 of medicine and after the
world
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 war 2 it reduces to a large extent. 1950 was the time when the
population
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 rose was seen and it never stopped increasing. Increase in
population
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cause
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causes
 a lot issue to poor as well as rich. More the
population
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 the more hand government has to feed. As the
population
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is increasing
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increases
 our limited resources are getting
scares
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scared
. There will be a point in
future
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the future
were
In or at or to what place
where
 the
population
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 will be so vast that our natural resources won't be able to
fullfill
put in effect
fulfil
 everyone's needs. There are solutions to these problems. One of them is that
government
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the government
 should adopt policies like one child her couple.
This
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 policy was implemented in China and it was a great success. The problem like
population
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 is something which will cause the
world
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 to starve to death one day. I will conclude with the point that government should take
initiative
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initiatives
an initiative
the initiative
 to control the rise of
population
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. It will help us to have a better future

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