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New technology have changed the way children spend their free time. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Researches and development have greatly improved on new
technologies and changes the
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technologies and changes in the
 ways teenagers spend their free
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however there
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however, there
 are many advantages and disadvantages
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 of the new and emerging technologies. These advantages have an up hand as against the disadvantages.
This
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 essay will show the superiority of the advantages against the disadvantages of new technologies on the way and manners
youth
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 spend their free
time
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. Information is very important and more importantly is the free or easy access to information. Without the right information
youth
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 would hardly make any headway in learning new skills and new technologies. Before the advent of new technologies
youths especially
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youths, especially
 student
find
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finds
 it difficult to get access to materials for their studies and project work, they will only really depend on the limited and outdated books in the library, but with the advent of the
technology
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 called
Internet
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the Internet
; getting the right information is just by the click of the button, fast reliable and affordable. Youths are more creative and could be self-taught as they can easily learn new skills ranging from photography, photo editing, music production, programming etc.
to
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To
 mention but a few. These have helped to put
kids
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the kids
 away from violence, drugs and troubles.
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, there could be some disadvantages arising from the inappropriate use of the new technologies, as the increase of social media have made many youths to be lazy, as they spent more of their
time
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 chatting away with friends on things that are irrelevant and do them little or no good, some have even taken to crime and fraud all because of the wrong exposure they get from the use of advance technologies. Despite the downside, the disadvantages cannot be compared with the advantages derived from the used of new
technology
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, as it has empowered many more
youth
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, as so many are now
enteprenun
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 as they have learnt some valuable skills using
technology
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 and have been able to create a brand and
do
engage in
make
 profitable businesses. In conclusion, the advent of new technologies have done
more good
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better
 than arms, if the right polies and controls are put in place to control the uses of these technologies in no distance
time
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 the negative effect on
youth
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 from the use of new
technology
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 will be a forgotten issue.

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