Some countries sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good, while others think there are disadvantages to this. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Owing to new trends in advertisements, mega companies financially support
sports team
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a sports team
to advertise their products. Many opine, it is a positive development.
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, others think
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has major drawbacks. In my opinion,
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offers must be availed. Nowadays, many companies
try
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are trying
to boost their revenue
generation
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generated
by advertising, as it attracts many customers.
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, the trend of marketing investment in sports is common and beneficial for investors as well as sports as a whole. For illustration,
Pakistan hockey federation
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the Pakistan hockey federation
was unable to bear
expenses
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the expenses
of athletes, due to lack of funds. But
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all the funds were sponsored by
international company
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international companies
an international company
, leading to participation of players, at an international level.
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, consumer spending of
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company nearly doubled within months.
On the other hand
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, a major issue is encountered in
form
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the form
of bias reviews. As an illustration, many viewers will cheer for their
favorite
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
investors rather
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then
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than
a team, which is full of skills and
sports man ship
fairness in following the rules of the game
sportsmanship
spirit.
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, money will
outpace
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natural talent and hard work.
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, producing a negative impact on sports. To conclude, some companies sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves. In my view, these kind of activities must be performed to aid sports in every aspect.
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trend will increase in foreseeable future.
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