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Many people are spending a lot of money on their weddings. Do you think this is a good thing?

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A wedding is one of the most important events in a person's life because it creates its own family. From ancient times
this
 event was covered by various traditions. All peoples
wanted
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have wanted
 to keep a couple forever with the help of customs and rituals. Today, people want to spend
this
day
 in a special way and
therefore
 organize and think over the holiday in detail. Of course, it's not cheap and sometimes it's space amounts.    A lot of controversies
has
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have
 to do with
concentrate
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concentrated
 so much money on marriage. On the one hand,
this
 experience is once in a lifetime experience, so everyone is trying to make it unforgettable. So, many girls dream of feeling like a queen on that
day
. And a beautiful dress, a fantastic hairstyle and unsurpassed makeup do
this
 thing.
However
, do not try to save, but it will still be expensive.
Also
 on
this
day
 they order a lush banquet and call their close and distant relatives and friends.
Moreover
, there must be a presenter who will entertain guests, make sure that everything goes exactly as planned and that old beliefs are fulfilled.
On the other hand
, it is one
day
, and it takes a lot of expenses and time. People think that the photos taken
in
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with
 the decorated place and in amazing clothes
are not valued
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don't value
 to them. Many consider
this
 nonsense and spend
this
day
 without ceremonies with hundreds of human and wedding gowns, and quietly in the relative circle. These costs could be something profitable to invest or buy the right thing, which is more rational. Do not forget that someone may not have
such
 a large account in the bank and
therefore
 not be able to pay for the party. In my opinion, allocate a lot of money on a celebration is not bad. It all depends on the desires and opportunities of those whom
this
day
.
This
 act is not bad, so it does no harm to anyone, but only brings positive emotions.
Therefore
, it is my opinion that spending or not spending large sums is the choice of brides themselves.

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