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Many people used distance- learning programs to study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the benefits as much as attending college or university. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people like to stay at
home
 rather than go outside. They prefer to get learning programs at
home
 than attend real
classes
. These two viewpoints have their own advantages. Both will discussed below. On one hand, society believes that studying programs at
home
 is more effective than attending college or university.
For instance
, if they have many assignments that need to be done but haven't been done yet. They can do that assignment,
while
 they join distance learning
classes
. It's called time efficiency, they can do several things in one moment. Distance-learning programs or online
classes
 make them more educated with technology. Advanced technology can be seen in many improvement apps that can be useful for online
classes
,
such
 as Zoom. That app makes online
class
 feels real, so teachers are able to communicate with students more intensely.
However
, they can learn how to make assignments by using gadgets. So, their work can be done more easily.
On the other hand
, the population think attending college or university will be more productive than studying at
home
. Studying in a real
class
, makes they can catch more material that the teacher gives.
This
 can make their grades higher if they can understand what the teachers teach. There are some materials that have to be discussed with teachers and friends in
class
, it will be more interesting if they can be discussed in reality. If they do that in online
classes
, the material can be not clear and satisfactory because it wasn't delivered well. In conclusion, there are two types of people that have an opinion about studying at
home
 or going to a real
class
. For me, I rather attend a real
class
 because it's not boring than studying at
home
. We can socialize with many people there.
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