In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the cause of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

At present, the average weight of people and unhealthy rate is rising
besides
their levels of fitness are declining.
This
essay explains why is hard working in the office affect to these problems and a good way to solve them is increasing the projects to improve officer’s health.
Initially
, the cause of problems is many people working on a computer in their office for a long time per day, while they walk just three times (from their home to a firm, from a desk to a canteen, and go back to their home again).
Moreover
, many officers work more than 6 hours daily, so they have no time to go to the gym.
For example
, my friend was a trainee in 2 months in the
last
year. After that, her weight had increased around 2 kilograms, because her work for 8 hours each day and the firm did not have a fitness centre for their employees.
Nevertheless
, The solution of these issues can make by the company, they should have a fitness centre area in their building.
In addition
, the human resources department should co-ordination with a hospital to have a delivery health checking every year for the employees.
For instance
, I was a trainee in the Stock Exchange of Thailand in the
last
year, they have the gym consist of a lot of machines for the physical activities. So, I worked 6-7 hours and taken 1-2 hour in the gym daily, and I was healthier. In conclusion, the company should prepare the exercise equipment for their staff, and
also
decreases working hour together for reduce people weight and increase their healthy level.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary
  • obesity
  • overweight
  • physical activity
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • exercise
  • unhealthy diet
  • fast food
  • urbanization
  • modernization
  • stress
  • awareness
  • education
  • government intervention
  • policies
  • promotion
  • sports
  • fitness programs
  • health education
  • taxation
  • public transportation
  • infrastructure
  • parks
  • recreational spaces
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