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some people think that leadership qualities are inherited by birth ,others argue that it can be developed through life experience discuss both views and write your opinion.

#people #leadership #qualities #birth #life
Certainly, it goes without saying that
leadership
 plays a fundamental role in the development of every nation.
Consequently
, leaders are substantially needed in every life field
;
Accept space
;
 even in every organization and team.
Although
, there are some commentators who believe that
leadership
 is an inherited criteria, I am strongly inclined to the opinion that
leadership
 qualities are acquired throughout the life.
Firstly
, the booming breakthrough in the
education
 technology has significantly increased the number of graduates who have
leadership
 qualities. Since, the recent
education
 strategy focuses on improving the skills of students as well as boosting their self-confidence.
For example
, a recent study conducted in London has shown that the percentage
to
Suggestion
of
 college graduates who have the ability of decision making in the critical situations rose by around 20% after applying the new learning programs in high schools and university.
In addition
, the family has a great influence on the personality of children and youngsters because parents
are almost considered
Suggestion
almost consider
 model roles for their offspring. To illustrate, a recent statistics published in Egypt
has revealed
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have revealed
 that young adults who succeeded to reach leading positions in the big economic organization were raised by highly educated parents. Undoubtedly, the various
life experience
Accept comma addition
life, experience
 acquired in school, home and work increase individual creativity, productivity and independence.
On the other hand
, a strong argument can be made on the opposite side.
To begin
 with, opponents state that genetics is now believed to contest all the human beings characters and abilities.
For instance
, a recent study has shown that more than 10% of the leading politicians in Canada in the
last
 decade were blood relatives.
Furthermore
, many children show the qualities of
leadership
 in very young age. To sum up, it can be clearly seen that
leadership
 characters are acquired rather than inherited talent. I do recommend that the ministry of
education
involve
Suggestion
involves
 the different programs that can implement
leadership
 criteria in the curriculum of students of all ages.
In addition
, a
nation-wide
occurring or extending throughout a country or nation
nationwide
 public
education
 to newly married couples can be organized to increase the awareness of parents about how to boost these great values in children.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inherited
  • charisma
  • decisiveness
  • confidence
  • personality traits
  • emotional intelligence
  • nurture over nature
  • education
  • training
  • real-world experiences
  • strategic thinking
  • empathetic communication
  • effective conflict resolution
  • perseverance
  • personal growth
  • genetic makeup
  • predisposition
  • conscious effort
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