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Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility to university difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

#accessibility #university
Admission to a higher institution has been said to be challenging for both the wealthy and penniless students. I completely agree with
this
 statement because being accepted is based on
merits
Suggestion
the merits
 and
also
, there are limitations to the number of people allowed into the school.
Firstly
, undergraduate school
have
Suggestion
has
 a certain standard they
up hold
keep or maintain in unaltered condition; cause to remain or last
uphold
.
This
 standard is used to carefully select individuals with higher grades into different facilities. In Nigeria, there are certain examinations for different courses, screening and interviews each student
have
Suggestion
has
 to pass in other to gain entry. Failure in any form will result in the rejection of any form of application.
As a result
, only people who meet the requirement are allowed to proceed.
Furthermore
, tertiary academies limit the quantity of applicants.
In other words
, universities have finite space with insufficient staff and facilities to allow every student that applies to be permitted.
For instance
, in University of Toronto, the average number of students who gain admission per year is approximately 300 out of about roughly 600 individuals who applied.
Therefore
, without
this
 restriction, several people
are easily gain
Suggestion
are easily gaining
have easily gained
 access to any school of
there
of them or themselves
their
 choice. In conclusion, I agree with the view that stated both the affluent and the poor face the same difficulty in accessing higher learning system due to the fact that both must meet academic requirements for admission and many universities have a limit on the
number
Suggestion
The number
Number
 of yearly intakes, which equally affects everyone.

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