Tobacco should be treated as illegal like other drugs. Smoking has not a single positive issue but lots of negative effects and therefore, it should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the above statement. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your experience. You should write at least 250 words.

There is no doubt that

tobacco

is an addictive substance whose harmful for our

health

In addition

, these days lots of people are smoking cigarettes and they don't think about all the issues that can cause all the substance in a cigarette. In

this

essay I'm going to talk about my disagreement about

this

statement that

this

should be illegal as well than drugs.

Firstly

, it's true that the percentage of people who

smoke

cigarettes is rising over the

last

century.

This

is an issue not only because those that consume

tobacco

can have a

health

problems

also

those who are close to them. An example of

this

could be the people who suffer

cardiorespiratory

issues. While there are those who

smoke

every day.

However

, are other that promise never

smoke

, but they're close to someone who does.

Furthermore

, cigarettes sometimes can be compared with drugs. Despite

this

tobacco

is legal and drugs are illegal.

Moreover

, there are those who wants that

tobacco

become illegal. But there is already a lot of advertising who tells how bad is to

smoke

the nicotine and all the issues that can induce their consume. To illustrate

this

point, when someone buys a package we can see publicity about the bad effects of

smoke

Also

in the street or metro there is a lot of advertising, who advise us that

smoke

can induce death or is not good for our

health

. To sum up,

smoke

cigarettes is not good for our

health

, but people who

smoke

are already concerned about the problem with that. Personally, their consume should not be illegal because each person who

smoke

knows all the bad effects associated with

this

On the other hand

, drugs have more controversial effects and they suppose a biggest problem in our society.

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4 paragraphs

298 words

7.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

7.5

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Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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