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Many people have difficulty maintaining a healthy diet. What are the causes of this problem? How could it be solved?

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As a proverb states, Health is wealth I strongly agree
by
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with
 the statement many
people faces
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people, faces
 difficulty maintaining healthy
food
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 habits nowadays. Looking at
present scenario
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the present scenario
, we all
loves
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love
 to eat palatable foods
.
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 Going to restaurants, cafes and fast
food
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 corners with friends and family are
daily source
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a daily source
the daily source
 of tasting new dishes where we
compromises
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compromise
 with our health having unwanted meals. I believe change in daily lifestyle, sedentary work patterns, hush and hurry life have replaced our healthy nutritional
food
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 with junk
food
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. We prefer eating roadside burgers without even thinking about consequences on our health.
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, excessive use of fertilisers and pesticides are degrading
quality
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the quality
 of
foodgrains
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food grains
, vegetables and fruits at source. Farmers
intentionally uses
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intentionally use
 chemicals to maximize production.
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, proper storage and maintenance of
food
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 products at warehouses lacks. Individually, in order to cope with
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 issue we should start disciplining ourselves with
healthy lifestyle
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a healthy lifestyle
. Practicing Yoga, meditation, going
gym
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the gym
, swimming, cycling
,
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,
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
 should be part of our daily routine.Nowadays,
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
spends
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spend
lot
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a lot
 a time playing on video games and
Ipads
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iPads
ipads'
ipad's
 rather on
ground
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the ground
grounds
 having any physical game which affects their physical and mental health as well. Parents should look upon
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 factor very carefully and create interest in sports to gain them good healthy lifestyle ahead. Positive thoughts
takes
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take
 place when we
workout
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work out
 and eventually leads us to consume nutritional foods.Many fitness applications and contents are available online where we can learn new healthy
receipes
directions for making something
recipes
 and exercises.
Infact
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In fact
, widespread knowledge should be
spread creating
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spread, creating
 awareness about appropriate use of chemicals and fertilisers by governments and NGO's for farmers and agricultural sections.

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