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The number of TV programs is growing day by day. Some people say it is good as it gives people more choices, while others say it affects the quality of TV programs. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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Technology is regarded as
cradle
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a cradle
the cradle
 of various entertainment means. A rapid rise in
TV
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 channels has been observed in contemporary times. A section of society argues that it is beneficial as there will be more alternatives, whereas a certain class thinks it hampers the worth of shows. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss both the sides of the given
argument
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arguments
 and will reach to an appropriate conclusion. A group favours multiple programs primarily because of the range it offers. With increased number, the variety of
genre
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genres
is
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are
 available which interest individuals. Often, the liking for anything differs from person to person, so everyone can benefit with
type
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the type
 of shows they like. To illustrate, Zee
TV
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, a famous Indian entertainment channel, maintained highest TRP for consecutive 5 years as the shows involved categories like crime, food, movies and songs.
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, there are people who think the value of programs decline if they are in bulk. Foremost, in order to provide multiple shows, there is a compulsion on
TV
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 producers.
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Consequently they
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Consequently, they
 come up with any type of
show which
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show, which
 might not be appealing but just for the sake.
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, currently, people prefer to watch
TV
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 only on
specific time
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a specific time
 for a particular
show which
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show, which
 they like as they do not find every program interesting. To conclude,
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 both the sides have their own intrinsic worth, I think having
limited but
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limited, but
 meaningful programs are more appropriate than just having them for the sake of having them.
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 programs are meant for the entertainment of individuals, if they do not fulfil that objective
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 it is of no use.
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