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Q: News stories on TV and in newspapers are very often accompanied by pictures. Some people say that these pictures are more effective than words. Waht is your opinion about this?

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In recent times, an enormous number of people have taken to travelling unlike before. Travelling has become a vocation and some have even built careers centred around it. There are a number of reasons why
this
 is the case, and in
this
 essay, I will be stating some of the reasons.
Firstly
, people travel for academic purpose. There has been an increase in the number of students who would rather want to study abroad, these could be due to the poor state of education in their home country, or it could be just for the experience of studying in a different country.
This
 is mostly seen among low income countries whose students would want quality tertiary education abroad.
Secondly
, business success can be achieved when once can garner experience and spread ones tentacles across the globe. Businesses
such
 as Microsoft, Google and Amazon with branches in
almoat
(of actions or states) slightly short of or not quite accomplished; all but
almost
 every continent of the world could achieve
the high
Suggestion
the highest
 rate of success they have by having their branches across the world., and
this
 will entail a constant back and forth travels by the employees.
In addition
, tourism is another major reason why people travel. Historical sites, different cultures draw a lot of tourist attention all around the world. While the tourist enjoys his visit, he
also
 helps to improve the financial status of
country
Suggestion
the country
 he is visiting by spending his money. Tourist
on the other hand
 forge
life long
continuing through life
lifelong
 relationships with the locals, he is exposed to different cultures and traditions which broadens his experience about life. Conclusively, while travelling gives some beautiful experiences, the modes of transportation are not assured safe. Accidents, plane crashes or ship
wreckage etc
Accept comma addition
wreckage, etc.
wreckage etc.
 are unavoidable and could sometimes lead to the death of some of the passengers.
However
, one
can not
can not
cannot
 totally ignore the need to travel.

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