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With the increase in the use of mobile phones and computers,fewer people are writing letters,some people think that the traditional skill of writing letters will disappear completely.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is an undeniable fact that with the advancement in
telecommunication
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people
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 to write
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emails and text rather than
letters
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people
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 believe that writing
letters
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 in the future.
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example
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 to explain why writing
letters
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 will not
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eradicated
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. Undoubtedly, these days more and more
people
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 mobile phones and computers for communication with friends and family members because it is
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 easiest and fastest way to commute. Many
people
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 believe that the traditional skills of writing
letters
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disappear
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have disappeared
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 because of mobile phones and computers.
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, it will not
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 eradicated because writing
letters
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used in many government offices.
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, in
India
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 the electricity department used writing
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 to complain,
for
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requesting
of
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electricity
metre
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meters
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 and so on. The officers
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 saved these
letters
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a
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proof.
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, in business writing
letters
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 is used for many important documents.
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, writing
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 not vanishing.
Furthermore
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, writing
letters
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 to friends and family members
as
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 a show gesture of love.
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 writing
letters
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as
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is
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 an emotion from writer to reader and
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 is not replaced by text
message
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messages
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 and images.
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, on
the
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 person's birthday, writing
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than sending text
message
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messages
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 and images. In
such
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case
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, our handwriting has special meaning for the recipient of our
letters
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, writing
letters
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 used in future
also
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although
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mobile phones and computers will continue to be the main means of communication because of their convenience and efficiency.
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, I believe traditional skills of writing
letters
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 is Steel important as
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 some special occasion.
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task response
Ensure that there is a clear introduction, supporting paragraphs, and a conclusion in your essay.
coherence and cohesion
Work on connecting your ideas in a more cohesive manner. Use transition words and phrases to link your ideas together more effectively.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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