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IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Answer: Music Bringing People Together (IELTS Cambridge 14)

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The given diagram illustrates the steps of generating
electricity
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 in a hydroelectric
power
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station
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.
First
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 of all, there were
servals
performance of duties or provision of space and equipment helpful to others
services
 steps included in generating
electricity
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. We can see that
water
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 from the river stored
at
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in
 a high-level reservoir in the dam.
Secondly
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, intake which used to flow
water
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 into the
power
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station
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 was open at
day
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time
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 and remain closed at night.
Thirdly
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, in a
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day
the time after sunrise and before sunset while it is light outside
daytime
time
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,
water
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 flows via intake in
power
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station
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 for generating
electricity
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.
On
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In
 the
next
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 step, the generator operates by reversible turbines at
day
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time
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 and supply
electricity
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 by
powerlines
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power lines
to
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To
 the national grid and remained
water
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 stored in a low-level reservoir at
day
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time
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. When it came to night
water
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 flows to
power
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station
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 again
and
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And
 here with the help of turbines,
water
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 pushed to upward at high-level
a
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A
 reservoir in the dam. Overall, for generating
electricity
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 in
hydroelectric
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a hydroelectric power station
hydroelectric power stations
power
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station
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 contained many steps and whole process divided
in
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into
day
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 and night.
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