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Many people believe that social networking sites such as facebook have had huge negative impact on both individually and society. To what extent do you agree?

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It is human to socialize. Web sites like Facebook, Twitter,
etc
 acted as a fuel to
this
 fire. Even though these sites did a fantabulous job of bringing people together, there are a few negative impacts on individuals. Social depression, mass manipulation, fake news, etc.
had
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Had
 created a few problems. Let's discuss these in the following paragraphs. Due to increase in the internet infrastructure, almost everyone is socially active online. Individually, each person reacts in a unique manner. It was shown in a survey that, 70% create a profile because everyone around them have it. People are giving in to peer pressure and believe they are isolated unless they are connected digitally. Yes, these platforms had
help
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helped
helping
 people grow exponentially, but it had brought a few of them down as well. Handling cyber bullying and trolling is not everyone's cup of tea. Trolls are not usually accountable for their action. Fake news, mass manipulations are some social issues which
arised
come into existence; take on form or shape
arose
arises
arise
 only due to these pages. There were claims that it is easier to
propogate
transmit from one generation to the next
propagate
 a fake news when compared to a
fact
a ceremonial dinner party for many people
feast
faucet
. It will have a negative impact on the society. Not everybody
follow
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follows
 social etiquette. Had these norms been followed, we wouldn't have been discussing about
this
. Not many countries have strict do's and dont's on social media. If these laws are stricter, people complain that their privacy is affected. So it has become a double edged sword. I believe social networking websites are powerful
tools but
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tools, but
 they have their own drawbacks. It depends on every one of us to keep its sanity. If
everybody
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everybody's
 tweets or comments
responsibilly
in a responsible manner
responsibly
 without affecting others, it can be the most effective medium to connect.
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