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Some people believe that men and women are equal and so women should be able to do any job they want. Others feel that men and women are not equal and therefore there are certain jobs which are not suitable for women. What is your opinion?

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Gender equality has come a long way in the working environment. There are certain people who argue that woman have equal rights as men and should be given the same opportunities.
However
,
this
 is refuted by others who feel that women are not able to perform various tasks which men can do.
This
 essay will discuss why women are capable of doing the same
work
 as men and if give the chance, produce better results.
Although
 jobs that require heavy lifting are usually given to men;
this
 is due to the perception that women are weak and fragile.They are justifiably worried about the health and safety of women more than men.
For example
, in the aviation industry, there are tasks which supervisors will only issue to men because the stain and workload with little to no supervision,
however
, if that same
work
 is given to a woman, he/she will be there to make sure it is done well in a safe environment.
As a result
, women are restricted to doing less meaningful duties as opposed to the male gender.
Nonetheless
, the use of technology as bridged the gap, and simplified the use of manpower to perform any task. Making it possible for women to participate in any complex and stressful
work
. Because of discrimination in the workforce, women prove themselves by their ability to multitask and
work
 in any harsh environment. They tend to approach their responsibilities in a different way compared to men with better precision and care, making them better leaders.
For instance
, in Nigeria, 60% of businesses with female executives have been successful in the past seven years.
Hence
, women are able to adapt to any situation in other ways, making them able to compete with men. In conclusion, it can be said that both men and women are blessed with individual gifts in certain areas, and by looking at the current situation, it will be unreasonable to believe that they cannot do each other's job.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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