Some people think that the use of computers in primary and secondary schools makes education more enjoyable and efficient, while others believe that too much dependence on computers causes both physical and emotional problems. Discuss both points of view and give your opinion.

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are increasingly common in schools everywhere.
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the benefits of
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are obvious, there are
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some people who believe relying on
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is harmful. I personally believe that
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has a role to play in schools, but needs to be used with care. The main advantage is that learning
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are very convenient and save a lot of time for both teachers and
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because the
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are able to work faster and do more tasks.
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, they can draw and write emails, which they can send to friends, and make “electronic” projects on subjects
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as animals and plants.
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, the teacher can make education enjoyable by using colourful images and videos from the internet.
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, both the teacher and the
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will enjoy learning.
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,
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is a very useful tool.
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, there are several problems. The main drawback is that using
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can cause physical problems for people of all ages, including
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. Prolonged staring at computer screens can lead to eyesight deterioration.
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, in Japan, the percentage of childhood myopia has increased by 20% in the past ten years
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the widespread of smartphones. The computer
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causes some mental problems
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as poor concentration. It is often said that blue light which are emitted by
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causes sleeping
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which makes people irritated easily.
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,
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have a negative impact on the human body. In conclusion, taking both viewpoints into full consideration, I stand by the opinion that
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can still be beneficial as long as a teacher should be careful not to have negative effects on
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’s health.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Interactive learning
  • Educational technology
  • Personalized learning
  • Digital literacy
  • Student engagement
  • Health concerns
  • Social interaction
  • Overreliance
  • Distraction
  • Privacy concerns
  • Security issues
  • Eye strain
  • Physical health
  • Emotional well-being
  • Critical thinking
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