Some people think that young people should choose their professions themselves. Other believe that their parents should choose for them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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One of the most controversial issues today relates to how young people have to choose their professions: by themselves or thanks to their parents’ helps. On one side of the argument, there are people who argue that the benefits of choosing the profession by themselves is considerably

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its disadvantages. The main reason for believing

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is that young people can follow their attitudes without any pressure from outside. It is

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possible to say that many people have been influenced by their parents and it has caused depression and unhappiness.

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possible to make the opposing case. It is often argued that in

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the parents decide is much easier. People often have

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opinion because young people are usually not sure about the future and the world of

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the job

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the cases

, sons follow the same working way of their parents. As a matter of fact, if the father is a lawyer, most likely sons will be too. As we have seen, there are no easy answers to

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question. On balance,

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, I tend to believe that should be better let people free to decide and free to make mistakes. Ideas and attitudes can change and would be necessary to follow one’s own path without any interference. Anyway, I understand that

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is not easy, because of the responsibilities we have

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every day

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Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

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Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Sentence 2 - Example
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

5.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

239 words

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