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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Please agree or disagree?

#growth #shops #towns #cities
Of the six types of media listed above,
three
in or at that place
there
 are to be chosen largely - because of their being representative - to look at their advantages and disadvantages related to communicating
information
: books,
radio
 and
television
. As
the oldest
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the old
 media form, books are still of great influence in recording
information
 and spreading knowledge. Almost all
information
 in history and most
information
 at present are stored and conveyed in books.
However
, in comparison with other technology-assisted media,
books
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book's
 shortcomings are
also
 apparent: they cannot sustain long-time storage and are comparatively lagging behind the time in delivering
information
.
Radio
 might be one of the earliest technological media. Its biggest advantage lies in its
convenience because
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convenience, because
 of its portability. With
radio
, people may listen to the up-to-minute
information
 anytime and anywhere only if the
radio
 signal is available. Of course, people sometimes complain that with visual pictures, it would be much better, and which, as known to all, results in what we call TV set, rather than
radio
.
In
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On
television
, people see
the best
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better
 integration of both visual and acoustic effects.
Furthermore
, people
more watch
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most watch
 TV for leisure
in addition
 to obtaining
information
 because of the sensual enjoyment it provides.
On the contrary
,
television
 has always been facing the fiercest criticism of its side-effect that
information
 is delivered in
such
 a passive way as to kill the audiences creativity. Agree with it or not,
television
 is the most effective in communicating
information
. Currently, most
housefolds
a social unit living together
households
house folds
 have
TV
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a TV
 set and some have even more than one. No other media parallels with it in terms of audience coverage.
Besides
, a big variety of
information
 is available
in
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on
television
,
such
 us news, documentary, music and movie, to meet
preferences
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the preferences
 of different audiences. What is
particular
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particularly
 of
television
 lies in its unmatched magic of live broadcast. Among others, these features suffice to draw the conclusion that
television
 is the most powerful in spreading
information
.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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