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The internet has made knowledge immediately available through computers and smartphones all over the world. Much of the information is free. Discuss the both advantages and drawbacks of this trend.

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In
this
 contemporary era, The Internet is revolutionising every aspect of life. Even more, most of the people got success with the help of
this
 technology by gaining their knowledge from it. Like the two sides of a coin, it has both benefits and drawbacks which will elucidate in
this
 essay. To embark upon, it has a plethora of advantages. Nowadays, everyone has the internet on their mobile, so they can easily access all types of knowledge from Google.
For example
, a person who wants to go into a new area and he does not know the directions, but he can use the Google map application and search the directions easily.
Furthermore
, The Internet is a good facility for everyone because these days most of the people prefer to use social media rather than the watching Televisions.
Therefore
, mostly all news is spreading through social websites due to an Internet.
For instance
, Recently the Government of the Punjab has given red alert to all districts about incoming floods because of heavy rain. So, these types of news spread like a fire on the internet and everyone gets
this
 knowledge easily. On the other side of an argument, it can be irrefutable it has few negative factors as well. Like, we can search anything on the Internet.
Thus
, it has bad aspect for children.
For example
, The children can easily access some non-adults websites just by signing up the Gmail.
Moreover
, it has another thing is that it helps for crimes as well.
For instance
, many criminals are using internet calling system for doing crimes and police cannot trace their calls.
Thus
, criminals got success to complete their targets. To recapitulate, it can be concluded that, it is very wide technology all over the world. It has more positive factors than its drawbacks, but if we used it for good purposes not for crimes.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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