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More and more schools allow fast food restaurant to sell their products to their students.Is it a positive or a negative development?

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This
 is definitely a negative development for it has given rise to many drawbacks. The
fist
the first or highest in an ordering or series
first
 drawback involves
negative effect
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a negative effect
negative effects
 on children`s
health
.
Students especially
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Students, especially
 those at
young
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younger
 ages do not have strong abilities of self-control. They can be easily attracted even though they are clear that those fast
food
 is demerit good which will
threat
something considered choice to eat
treat
 their
health
.
It
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It's
 easy to understand.
For example
, if children are required
to made
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to make
 a choice between cola and water,
then
 it is absolutely cola, which may cause obesity. In a nutshell, the decision of allowing fast
food
 restaurant can bring harm to students`
health
. Aside from the threat on students`
health
, the phenomenon
also
 has
negative effect
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a negative effect
negative effects
 on the formation of eating habit. It is quite important because it mainly affects people`s preference of dishes. If they are getting used to have fast
food
 at young ages,
then
 it is really
helped
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helping
for
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in
 development of unhealthy eating habit, which is hard to be corrected in the future.
For instance
, it is difficult for Mexican to eat without
chili
ground beef and chili peppers or chili powder often with tomatoes and kidney beans
chilli
, because it is not only their preference, but
also
 is their eating habit, which is the most important factor. In short, the permission of setting fast
food
 restaurant in schools could bring significant negative effect on children. Tough people might not recognize the cost of consuming fast
food
, but it is necessary
of
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by
for
 us to be realized.
For
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In
 many countries
such
us
to the same degree (often followed by 'as')
as
 China and Korea, fast
food
 is a kind of import good, so
it
it is
it's
 even generally more expensive than other dishes.
Hence
, different from what is happening in America that many people consume it because it is cheaper and they have no better choice. In short, especially for students in school, it must be a big amount of cost. Of
course there
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course, there
 are many advantages. Undoubtedly, it saves time. For students
whoa
the person or persons that; the one that
who
 are missing time of lunch because of remaining
assignment it
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assignment, it
 will be
good
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the best
 choice of them to buy some fast
food
such
us
to the same degree (often followed by 'as')
as
 hamburgers, which are portable and fast.
Although
 it seems awesome, its drawbacks still outweigh benefits, which cannot be ignored by people.
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