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Some people think that success is the best measure of intelligence whilst others think that intelligent can be measured in other ways. What is your opinion?

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There is a dispute whether the achievement of a higher social status it the most suitable way to evaluate
brainpower
 or if there are other manners to estimate it. I am of the opinion that being successful is not important for everyone. The arguments against and
further
 methods that are available to
analyze
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analyse
 intelligence I will discuss in
this
 essay. The most important reason why success is not the right way to assess intelligence is the fact that it is not the only goal, intelligent people want to achieve. In fact, there are other goals
such
 as the pursue of happiness or the opportunity for self-realization that people, nowadays, are attracted to. A good example for
this
 is
the young
Suggestion
the younger
 generation. Statistics have shown that for them leisure time and personal fulfilment
is
Suggestion
are
 more important than working hard to get a high position at work.
Moreover
,
brainpower
 can not be defined by one parameter due to the fact, that it is composed of several skills, the individual has
inheritad
occurring among members of a family usually by heredity
inherited
 and/or developed through life. In general, these can be organized in social skills,
such
 as team spirit or the ability to emphasize, and in educational skills, including logical thinking or numeracy. One clear example of a method to evaluate these competences is the assessment-
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
Center
 that every applicant has to pass through before starting a practical training. In conclusion, measuring the
brainpower
 by people's success is not the most effective method.
In contrast
, it is only one goal
intellegent
having the capacity for thought and reason especially to a high degree
intelligent
 people are
pursueing
following in order to overtake or capture or as accompaniment to such pursuit
pursuing
 in life.
Therefore
, in my
opinion it
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opinion, it
 is important to assess all the competences that intelligence consists of.
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