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Some museums have an admission fee while others are free entry.

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Some museums have an
admission
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fee
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 while others are free
entry
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. In my opinion, museums which free
entry
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 will have a chance to have many people travel to there, but an
admission
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fee
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 has given more benefit to the museums because museums can use
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 money for
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 and development. A
museum
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 that free
entry
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 can raise a number of spectators. If the aim of a
museum
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 is showing some traditional or history of something in the country, a
museum
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 should free
entry
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. When do not have an
admission
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fee
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, it attracts people to
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 to
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museum
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 to study about their country's history. The
museum
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 of Siam Commercial Bank,
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,
this
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museum
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 is showing about the history of banking and money in Thailand. It is free
entry
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 for everyone. Granted, a free
entry
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museum
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 can have many spectators, but a
museum
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 can receive more benefit from the
admission
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fee
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. A museums have to spend a lot of money for hiring many professional for doing
museum
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 activities. Money from
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fee
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 are necessary for the
operation
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 and development. Thailand Ancient Cars
museum
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,
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,
this
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museum
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 has many cars and many professional for maintaining it. If
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museum
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 does not have an
admission
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fee
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 for support the
operation
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, it will be close. In conclusion, a
museum
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 that does not have an
admission
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fee
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 can have many spectators while an
admission
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fee
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 is important for the
operation
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 and development the
museum
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.
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, when comparing between the advantage and disadvantage, I am convinced the
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fee
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 gives the benefit to the
museum
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 more than free
admission
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.

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