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Life has become much more stressful compared to our parent’s generation. As a result, stress related illnesses are increasing around the world. Why is stress such a problem in the modern world and what do you think can be done to overcome the problems caused by stress?

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Life
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 has become much more difficult than the past.
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 has led to increased
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 related illnesses around the globe.
Stress
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 has become a problem in today’s world because of increased job load and poor diet. It can be solved by having a balanced
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life
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 routine and improving dietary habits. In today’s fast-paced world,
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 contributes a great deal to person’s tension. The competition in the employment is so high, that most workers either spend the entire day at the office or
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 from home without getting any time to relax.
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, people eat more junk food nowadays as compared to our parent’s generation which
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 increases the potential to get sick.
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, the average number of hours employer
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spent
 at a job is 60 per week compared to 35 in the past. The problems caused by
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 can be solved by having a proper
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life
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 balance and a good diet. People should have a timetable, which includes time for employment, family and friends, which they should follow in order to lead a healthy
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. They should
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 monitor what they eat and should increase the amount of vegetables and proteins
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 of the fatty, oily food they get outside. To illustrate, a recent study published by Harvard University, showed that the number one cause of serious diseases like diabetes and hypertension is
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. In conclusion, tension related diseases have increased nowadays because
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 has become more exhausting. The two main reasons for
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 are increased
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 burden and unhealthy eating. The solutions to overcome these problems are twofold: good
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life
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 balance and healthy diet.
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