Government should spend money on railways more than roads.

Government
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The government
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should spend money on
railways
more than
roads
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on roads
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. I agree that
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the government
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government
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the government
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budget should
spend
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be spent
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on trains and
railway
development more than spend money on roads because trains are
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environmentally
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environment
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environmentally
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friendly transport more than
cars
and
railways
can solve the
traffic
problem
. Investment in
railway
systems
can improve the quality of public transportation. If the country has
the
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an
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effective
railway
systems
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system
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,
people
will use trains more than private
cars
. Decreasing
a
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the
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number of car usage can reduce air pollution from
cars
.
People
have a good life when they stay in a good environment.
For example
, Singapore is a country which has
the
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apply
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effective
railways
around the city,
this
country has a lot of train stations.
The private
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Private
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car is not necessary for
people
, so air pollution from
cars
is not a
problem
in Singapore. It is a good environment for living. At the same time, when
people
choose to travel to work by
a
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train,
people
will use the private
cars
lower.
This
is solving the
traffic
problem
, and commuters
also
use less time to travel to work by public transport when they do not have a
problem
with
traffic
jam
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jams
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. MRT and BTS are
railway
systems
in Bangkok,
for instance
,
people
from residential areas can go to the city centre in one hour by
a
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train
while
it
uses
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takes
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more than two hours if travel by
a
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apply
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car on the same route. In conclusion,
government
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the government
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should invest in
railway
systems
rather than roads, because
railways
give
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apply
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the
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apply
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benefit
to
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apply
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the community by
reduce
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reducing
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pollutions
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pollution
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and
solve
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solving
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the
traffic
problem
.

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Grammar
Pay attention to the use of singular and plural forms in your sentences. It should be 'by train', not 'by a train', 'use private cars less', not 'use the private cars lower'.
Lexical resource
Try to vary your vocabulary. Instead of repeating 'the traffic problem', you could use 'congestion', 'heavy traffic', 'traffic issues' etc. to make your writing more interesting.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to use a variety of sentence structures to express your ideas. This not only demonstrates your language proficiency, but also makes your essay more engaging. For example, instead of starting your sentences with 'People' or 'Government', you could use more complex structures such as 'By investing in railways, the government can...'

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • environmental footprint
  • efficiency
  • pollution
  • cost-effectiveness
  • economic development
  • accessibility
  • public transportation
  • congestion
  • air pollution
  • initial investment
  • maintenance
  • upgrades
  • rural
  • urban
  • last-mile connectivity
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