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Some people think that sending criminals to prison is not effective. Education and job training should be used instead. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #criminals #prison #education #job
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Some people believe that providing better
education
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 opportunities and
job
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 training should replace prison sentences in combating
crime
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. Personally, I think
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 is a one- sided point of view and
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 disagree with it. There are a number of compelling reasons why it is unreasonable to consider imprisonment to be an obsolete practice. Prison sentences serve as one of the embodiments of justice and fairness in society. When a person commits an unlawful act, be it a
misdemeanor
a crime less serious than a felony
misdemeanour
 or a felony, there should be punishments or else society would fall into chaos.
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, prisons are not only a physical place that keeps criminals contained to protect innocent
people but
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people, but
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 a reminder of the consequences of violating the law.
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 better
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 and
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 training can enhance a person’s awareness and
employabilitythat
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 will, in theory, reduce
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, they cannot eliminate all the elements that induce a person to become a criminal. In fact, there have been many heinous crimes committed by well-educated people,
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 the infamous sexual assault on a Vietnamese child in Japan. It is naive to expect everyone to follow the law just because they are provided with better
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 and
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 skills. We cannot disregard the fact that some people are morally bad by nature and some people who are psychologically unstable may show a propensity for
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. In conclusion, better
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 and
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 training are not the ultimate answer to
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, nor can they replace prison sentences in
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 regard. It is the combination of both measures that can truly make a difference in the fight against
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.

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