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Some people think that to be successful in sports natural ability is the main important reason others think that hard work and practice is more important Discuss both views with opinion

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Although
 It is believed by some that natural ability is all it takes to achieve
success
 in sporting activities, others think that being hardworking and
pracitising
a customary way of operation or behavior
practicing
practising
unrelentlessly
 is more paramount. In my opinion, I believe that
hardwork
Suggestion
hard work
 and resilience
is
Suggestion
are
 the major key to achieving
success
. On the one hand, it is believed by many that having a talent is all it takes to be successful in a sport because a talented person has more advantage of achieving his goals than someone who is not a natural.
In other words
, an individual talented in playing a game like football does not need to spend rigorous hours in training because he is a natural and can easily master the skills,
as a result
 of
this
, he will be more favoured amongst his other team members.
On the other hand
, supporters of
this
 view believe that working hard and practising regularly is the most important key to
attaining
Suggestion
attain
success
 and I agree.
This
 is because regardless of being a natural if an individual does not partake in regular
pratises
a customary way of operation or behavior
practices
protests
practice
 he will not reach the top of the ladder in his chosen sport.
For instance
, according to the recent survey carried out by the National Sport Federation, it has been reported that a higher percentage of footballers who worked hard and practised on a regular basis were more successful than the players with natural talent,
consequently
, re-emphasizing the need of
hardwork
Suggestion
hard work
 and resilience. In conclusion,
although
 there are
varied
Suggestion
varying
 opinions, I believe that the key to
success
 in any sport is
hardwork
Suggestion
hard work
 irrespective of being a natural.
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