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Tourists to other countries need to follow local customs and behaviours. A few people consider it truthful. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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 it is thought by some that tourist should cultivate the lifestyle and moral stand of a community, others believe that visited country ought to accept another
culture
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 by the visitors. As well as giving my personal opinion,
this
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 essay will discuss why a local government custom and behaviour should be extended, retained, and
conversely
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, the benefits of embracing the other arts. On the one hand,
culture
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 and behavioural activities are the core of a land, In another for it not to go into extinction, it should be retained. More specifically, for people visiting. Continuous practicing of these norms would develop the social ways of life of that community. What is more, generations to come would know the values, and acts of their background. In Africa,
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, respect is a key value and it cannot be traded for anything.
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,
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 attitude would allow the continuation of
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 activity. Welcoming another
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,
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, is often believed to improve the growth of an economy. Allowing other perception and background would bring about exposure, because the knowledge and ideas visitors without disparity would be used to establish, correct and modify theirs to become a standard. Not only would their standard of living, but
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 their economic growth would increase, since new ideas are always generated and put in place.
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, Nigeria today was reported by international data analysis to be among the world best, simply because of her flexibility to another
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. Whereby, her economy grown vastly. To sum up, while people may vary in their opinion, I, from my point of view,
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 embracing other ways of life and behaviour activities would bolster the economy.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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