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Stores should sell local food products and not the imported food products. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, the
hyper markets
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hypermarkets
 are increasing due to the people's
choose
a state of extreme confusion and disorder
chaos
 towards world market products. Due to
this
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, the people's interest moves away from the local food products of their
country
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. I largely argue that each
country
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 should have more space to sell their
consumable
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consumer
product
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 as compared to foreign products.
Firstly
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, countries are trying hardly to become a strong competitor in the world market, in measures of the Gross Dometic
Product
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(
Accept space
(
GDP).
This
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 makes each
country
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 to enter into
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
neighbourhood
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neighbouring
countries
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country
 for selling their products to
increases
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increase
 their annually profit in industries like food, automobile, textile
etc
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arts
,.
For example
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, in the name of import and export, a
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country
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Country
 export rice to
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
country
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 with all inclusive of taxes and import the money from them, which will
increases
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increase
 the profit and annual
income
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 of that
country
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. Even though the nation
get
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gets
income
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 from the other countries for entering their food products for sales, the grocery products manufacture in own countries and sell in their market, have a higher profit scale when compare to other
income
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.
Secondly
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, the foreign products will take more time to reach sale place, which will reduce the
product
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 quality. Nations start to export their products with the help of logistics, but, in
transporataion
a facility consisting of the means and equipment necessary for the movement of passengers or goods
transportation
, the
product
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 cannot reach the respective destination as planned,
this
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 will
led
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lead
 the
product
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 to become less quality.
For example
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, if the
diary
a farm where dairy products are produced
dairy
product
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 is
transferring
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transferred
 from one nation to
other
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the other
 within a few hours with the help of
airline
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an airline
the airline
 or ship way, but due to some
climatic
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climate
 change, the
product
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 cannot reach the place at the planned time, which make the item to be less consumable. Own products from each
country
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 can reach any part of their
country
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 within a few hours with as possible of freshness of the grocery item. In
conclude
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concluding
, the foreign consumable products
has
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have
 a health issue to the people due to quality reduction. While the grocery items from their hometown has a great freshness
in
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of
 the
product
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, and annual
income
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 of the
country
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 being increases.
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