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Your English-speaking friend has asked for your help with a college project he/she is doing about celebrating New Year in different countries. Write an letter to your friend. In your letter: * say how important New Year is to people in your country * describe how New Year is celebrated in your country * explain what you like about New Year celebrations in your country

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Dear Sandy, I hope
this
 letter finds you well. I am writing regarding your college project and to give you some information about
Brazilians
' New
Year
 celebrations. I believe the New
Year
 has a huge impact on
Brazilians
' mentality and
overall
 energy regarding our goals for the future as it brings more positivity to people.
Additionally
, it is a crucial event to celebrate the effort people have been putting into their lives throughout the
year
. Most
Brazilians
' New
Year
's parties have a few symbolic elements,
such
 as wearing white clothes to represent peace and eating fresh local fruits and nuts.
Moreover
, people tend to have champagne at midnight
as well as
 watch the fireworks, either at a local park or on TV. The reason why I enjoy our traditional New
Year
's Eve is because we are
together with
 our families and closest friends.
Also
, sometimes we play games and exchange gifts.
Finally
, another important element we can find here is the positive mindset that only
Brazilians
 can have. I hope
this
 can be useful to your project. Best regards, Amanda Lago
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task response
Expand on your ideas a bit more to fully explore each theme you introduce, offering more details where possible to enrich the reader's understanding.
coherence cohesion
Consider using a variety of transition words to link your ideas more smoothly and to improve the flow of your paragraphs.
greeting and closing
You've done a wonderful job of introducing the topic and concluding your letter, which frames your message nicely.
task achievement
Your letter addresses the task directly, providing clear information on each of the points requested.
coherence cohesion
You organized your content well, with each paragraph focusing on a single idea as requested, which made your letter easy to follow.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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