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Some people believe that the increasing number of vehicles is one of the biggest problem facing cities, while others believe that cities have bigger challenges. Discuss both views and state your opinion.

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increasing
Suggestion
An increasing number
Increasing number
number
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 of vehicles
is
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are
 one of the biggest
challenge
Suggestion
challenges
 facing cities, as believed by some people while
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 stated that cities has
bigger challenge
Suggestion
a bigger challenge
.
Larger
Suggestion
A larger number
number
Use synonyms
 of
vehicle
Suggestion
vehicles
 on the road in the cities
has been linked
Suggestion
have been linked
 with
air
Use synonyms
pollution which
Accept comma addition
pollution, which
 can adversely affect the health status of people living in
Linking Words
this cities
Suggestion
this city
these cities
.
Increasing
Suggestion
An increasing number
number
Use synonyms
 of vehicles is not the only problem facing the cities as they are faced with various challenges like insecurity, over-population, high cost of living. I believe that cities are faced with a lot of challenges and increasing
number
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 of vehicles is one of
such
Linking Words
 problem. The high
number
Use synonyms
 of vehicles on the road contribute to
air
Use synonyms
 pollution and there is
possibility
Suggestion
a possibility
the possibility
 of long exposure to the polluted
air
Use synonyms
as a result
Linking Words
 of traffic congestion
.
Accept space
.
 Excessive exposure to polluted
air
Use synonyms
 has been linked to
health condition
Suggestion
health conditions
the health condition
 like chronic
bronchitis which
Accept comma addition
bronchitis, which
 can affect the
out put
final product; the things produced
output
 of the fellow at work.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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