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Some museums and art galleries charge admission fees, while others have free entry. Do you think the advantages of charging for admission outweigh the disadvantages?

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With
this
, I am totally in
favor
promote over another
favour
 that there should be a charge levied for the
entry
 to
such
 places and can justify the same with numerous reasons.
To begin
 with, I would like to say that anything which comes for free does not have much value. If the
entry
 is made free no one would understand the importance of
such
 places.
Moreover
, people would
then
 visit
such
 places just for pastime and the core reason of opening
such
 places will not be met. I remember in 2009,
entry
 to Kolkata museum was made free for a month and the museum almost turned into a park because people started visiting the museum and made it a place to loiter around.
Consequently
, the government had to start charging the
entry
 fees again. Not only that,
entry
 to
such
 places brings a lot of revenue to
Government which
Suggestion
the Government, which
the Government which
 is used for their maintenance. If
this
 revenue is stopped,
Government
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the Government
 will have to start financing for the same which
otherwise
 could have been used elsewhere. According to a report published by the finance ministry in India in 2010, an amount of 20 million was spent on the repair of Nehru Museum where
entry
 was free. To sum up, I would say that these places should be given special care and their importance needs to be intact. With
this
, putting an end to
entry
 fees to
such
 places is not a good idea. No one would value diamonds if they were as easily available as stones. These places are no less than diamonds
for
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in
 the country.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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